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Re: Alive but Dying
Hmm. I do like the theme of this poem; that throughout you are describing everything that is wrong, and then the last line that turns it around. However, just by ...
Feb 12, 2008 -
Re: Meeting Place
Just gonna go through this line by line: Where will you go, When it gets too much to bear? And I will try to meet you there.
Feb 12, 2008 -
Re: This game will drive you crazy
Second link on this page to download - A Japanese version of Super Mario. I finally completed it yesterday, with about -400 lives. Do eeet, post your frustrations here :P
Feb 12, 2008 -
Re: Report A Site Bug
Nate, I can't change the word of the week - the admin link takes me to My YWS. Tried at 4:25pm GMT today using Firefox.
Feb 10, 2008 -
Re: Want To Change Your Username?
I'm a genious in my older years. :lol:
Feb 9, 2008 -
Re: Don’t Look At My State Of Mind
Edited it slightly. Thanks for the comments, keep them coming!
Feb 9, 2008 -
Re: Don’t Look At My State Of Mind
I try so fucking hard sometimes That I forget that I’m alive. Standing on a ledge and down below photographers and news reporters flash, and oh, the wind - I ...
Feb 9, 2008 -
Re: Report A Site Bug
I get logged out when I click on YWS Groups.
Feb 5, 2008 -
Re: I'd Like To Stay, But It Can't Be This Way
I liked the similes you used, but it seemed a little...unfinished. I was waiting for one more line, to rhyme with your last one, to just kind of round it ...
Feb 3, 2008 -
Re: YWS - One Page
:lol:
Feb 3, 2008 -
Re: Having trouble critting?
BBB means that nothing happens when the bold or italic buttons are pressed when you're posting a reply to a thread. Not working for me either, how very strange.
Feb 3, 2008 -
Re: Everything's Gonna Be Alright.
Welcome to YWS :) I'd like to point out that we use a 2:1 ratio here; that is, for every piece of work you post, you need to critique two ...
Jan 31, 2008 -
Re: Freezing in ecstasy
I love the first stanza, and how you make references to nature in describing all the eyes you have seen. I also like how you separated the speech into its ...
Jan 31, 2008 -
Re: Belladonna
I really like the tone of this piece, it just...sounds so good, you know? Your description is excellent, as well. Though I think I liked it better before I read ...
Jan 31, 2008 -
Re: Under the Bridges
I quite like this style, it sounds a little...old, it's nice. I also like how you used repetition - "passed away, forever away", and "lain on the grass, lain on ...
Jan 31, 2008
